The King and His Missing Queen
The King wept in sorrow when he had come to the realization his bride had disappeared. He was unsure if she had run or if she had been taken but he knew there was only one person that could be behind this, his enemy King Archer. The King and King Archer had hated each other for years and he knew that only he would do something so cruel as to take away his wife.
"I want a search party of 300 people to enter the woods and find my wife" shouted the King to his trusty advisors. They all nodded in compliance.
The next day the King's wishes were followed through like promised, a search party left with 300 people to find his wife. They searched high and low through the woods looking for any sign of her.
Many days passed with no sign until a young bird came to a group of searchers and told them he saw the young bride leaving the kingdom on a horse with a young child. The people were confused as to who she could have left with. They find out what direction she was headed and followed her path.
Many hours passed and they finally came to a kingdom that neighbored their own but that was many miles away. As they entered they began to ask around if anyone had seen the Queen but all replied with a no. They spent all day in this Kingdom until finally someone came upon a cottage where they saw the Queen tied to a huge tree where she lied there looking ill. They immediately rushed to her side to set her free.
"What happened to you, my Queen" asked the man. "I was tricked by the awful King Archer, he brought me here against my will" replied the Queen, "A little boy approached me saying he was in trouble in the woods so I followed him only to be trapped by King Archer and his men."
The Queen continued to weep because of her awful state, she was dirty, hungry and thirsty. The men quickly released her from her shackles and began the journey back to their King.
When they returned the King could not help but cry tears of joy that his lovely Queen had returned to him. She washed up, got dressed and had a meal fit for a King and Queen.
Author's Note: I wrote this story with the idea of Rama and Sita from the Ramayana. Sita was taken and held hostage by the enemy of Rama. Rama sent his people to find her and bring her home to him. When they found her she was in terrible shape and ashamed of how she looked. This story inspired me to write about a King losing his Queen to his enemy and her returning to him.
Bibliography: "Sita and Rama" By: Sister Nivedita
The King wept in sorrow when he had come to the realization his bride had disappeared. He was unsure if she had run or if she had been taken but he knew there was only one person that could be behind this, his enemy King Archer. The King and King Archer had hated each other for years and he knew that only he would do something so cruel as to take away his wife.
"I want a search party of 300 people to enter the woods and find my wife" shouted the King to his trusty advisors. They all nodded in compliance.
The next day the King's wishes were followed through like promised, a search party left with 300 people to find his wife. They searched high and low through the woods looking for any sign of her.
Many days passed with no sign until a young bird came to a group of searchers and told them he saw the young bride leaving the kingdom on a horse with a young child. The people were confused as to who she could have left with. They find out what direction she was headed and followed her path.
Many hours passed and they finally came to a kingdom that neighbored their own but that was many miles away. As they entered they began to ask around if anyone had seen the Queen but all replied with a no. They spent all day in this Kingdom until finally someone came upon a cottage where they saw the Queen tied to a huge tree where she lied there looking ill. They immediately rushed to her side to set her free.
"What happened to you, my Queen" asked the man. "I was tricked by the awful King Archer, he brought me here against my will" replied the Queen, "A little boy approached me saying he was in trouble in the woods so I followed him only to be trapped by King Archer and his men."
The Queen continued to weep because of her awful state, she was dirty, hungry and thirsty. The men quickly released her from her shackles and began the journey back to their King.
When they returned the King could not help but cry tears of joy that his lovely Queen had returned to him. She washed up, got dressed and had a meal fit for a King and Queen.
Author's Note: I wrote this story with the idea of Rama and Sita from the Ramayana. Sita was taken and held hostage by the enemy of Rama. Rama sent his people to find her and bring her home to him. When they found her she was in terrible shape and ashamed of how she looked. This story inspired me to write about a King losing his Queen to his enemy and her returning to him.
Bibliography: "Sita and Rama" By: Sister Nivedita
Hey Paige,
ReplyDeleteThe story was very Interesting! The plot it had tied very well to that of the story of Rama and Sita from the Ramayana. It was very clever what you had done having a little boy trick the queen into following King Archers plot which led to her capture. This was a great story and I look forward to reading your future stories!
Hey Paige! Your story retelling almost reminded me of a fairy tale format. I used a fairy tale format in one of my retold stories. I feel like the epics would flow really well remodeled as fairy tales, which is interesting because the traditional fairy tales are European while these stories are [obviously] Indian. It was cool to see someone else doing this sort of style as well.
ReplyDeleteHey Paige,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed getting to read your story. Even though this story is based off of an Indian Epic I really liked how you were able to switch it around and make yours seem like a European fairytale like the ones that I grew up reading and listening to. It was clever having the little boy be th one to trick the Queen
Hey Paige, to start off I just want to say that I like the title of your story. As I was scrolling, it definitely drew my attention. I also liked how you made it relevant to the epic, the Ramayana, with your own twist. I enjoyed reading it and I am looking forward to reading some more of your stories!
ReplyDeleteHi Paige, I really like the pacing you've done with this story! The breaking up of the paragraphs helps us feel the passing of time as the King is upset that his wife is gone. I liked the parallels you drew between the Ramayana and your story, and I think that you do a good job displaying the emotions at hand.
ReplyDeleteHi Paige. I liked the relationship between the king and the queen. However, I think you could have really been specific and even created your own characters and kingdom. Despite what many think, giving more details and specifics makes a story a lot more relatable than a story without names or character origin. I would have loved to hear about the beginning of the feud between the kings, the relationship between the king and the queen and how that began.
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