Week 8 Comments and Feedback

Overall, I would say that the feedback I have received has been extremely helpful. My favorite comments that I receive are the ones that tell me a positive about my story and then also give a suggestion on how to fix something that they did not like. I would say the feedback I have been giving has been helpful, I try and give a couple of positives about their writing but also give a suggestion on what I think will help improve it. While looking at other people's writings and stories I have found some good strategies and good ideas on what to incorporate in my stories. I am happy with my introduction post, I think it gives people a good idea of what I am like and who I am as a person. I really enjoy reading other people's blogs and getting to know other people in my class even though it is an online class. I think in order to make my comments more useful I need to look at the other comments and try to suggest something that has not already been suggested. For my comments I think I need to look at what the most common thing people are saying as a suggestion and prioritize that as what I need to fix. I think my comment wall is working well and I look forward to the comments that will be coming in the next couple of weeks.

I chose this image because it talks about great aspects that should be in all feedback. It is important to be specific and give positive and corrective comments.

Image Information

Comments

Week 4 Story: The King and His Missing Queen

The King and His Missing Queen The King wept in sorrow when he had come to the realization his bride had disappeared. He was unsure if she had run or if she had been taken but he knew there was only one person that could be behind this, his enemy King Archer. The King and King Archer had hated each other for years and he knew that only he would do something so cruel as to take away his wife. "I want a search party of 300 people to enter the woods and find my wife" shouted the King to his trusty advisors. They all nodded in compliance. The next day the King's wishes were followed through like promised, a search party left with 300 people to find his wife. They searched high and low through the woods looking for any sign of her. Many days passed with no sign until a young bird came to a group of searchers and told them he saw the young bride leaving the kingdom on a horse with a young child. The people were confused as to who she could have left with. They find out ...

Week 7 Story: The Great Fight

The Great Fight Once upon a time, long long ago, their was a fight that would change the world. This fight was between two sisters that happened to be twins. Long before this fight began the two sisters grew up as the best of friends. These sisters did everything together and both were princesses to their parents who were the king and queen of a magnificent city. Many people had always wondered who would take the throne when the time came but this was never a thought of the young girls, until one day.... The king and queen came to their daughters the day they turned 18 and told them that in order for one of them to take the throne they must first complete some tasks. They said that whoever was to complete the tasks the quickest and with the most success would gain the throne. The sisters agreed, and the tasks ensued. For weeks there were archery tournaments, hunting tournaments, agility tests, and tasks that tested their ability to think rationally and quickly. Weeks we...

Reading Post: Jataka Tales, Part A

The Guilty Dogs By: Noor Inayat introduces main character introduces setting of story describes the surroundings describes the characters actions uses dialogue between characters introduces dogs sets up the the climax dialogue expresses the emotions of the humans the dogs are now in trouble for the bad behavior the dogs must find a way to survive dialogue to discuss the plan the chief dog comes in contact with the king the dog confronts the king the chief saves the other dogs The group of saved dogs.

Paige's Indian Epics

Search This Blog